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The charts below show the percentages of students following different types of course at Salisbury College in 1984, 1994, and 2004

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The charts below show the percentages of students following different types of course at Salisbury College in 1984, 1994, and 2004
The pie charts compare the proportion of students who studied different types of
courses
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mixed-media
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courses
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,
correspondence
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courses
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, face-to-face
courses
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 and online at Salisbury College in 1984, 1994 and 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest
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 of
courses
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 was face-to-face
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however
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, the lowest proportion was shown in online. As the pie charts show, in 1984, the highest
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 was indicated in face-to-face
courses
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 at 67%, but the smallest proportion was shown in
mixed-media
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courses
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 at 13%.
Correspondence
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courses
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 was accounting for 20%. Regarding 1984, the biggest
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 was face-to-face
courses
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 at 54%, but the lowest
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 was indicated in online at 12%. Indexes of
mixed-media
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 and
correspondence
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courses
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 were similar at 14% and 20%. In 2004, face-to-face
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 remained at the highest
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 at 47%
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by contrast
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, the lowest
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 was
correspondence
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courses
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 at 5%. Online
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figure
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 indicated 35%.
Mixed-media
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courses
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 was accounting for 20% in Salisbury College.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, mixed-media, correspondence, percentage, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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