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You recently stayed with a friend for a few days while visiting their city. After returning home, you realised that you had left an important item at their home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: *Thank your friend for letting you stay. *Describe the item that you left behind and where you think it is. *Explain how your friend can return it to you.

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Dear Simran, I hope you are doing well.
Firstly
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, I would like to thank you for letting me stay at your home
,
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 when I visited Chandigarh
last
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 week. You made my journey even more beautiful
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 we spent sufficient quality time together after a long time. Yesterday, I realised that I
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 an important ID proof at your home
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that is
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 my Aadhar card. Next week, I need to go for my passport appointment in Ludhiana. So, I was gathering my essential documents beforehand for it, but the thought cropped up in my mind that I
left
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 it at your house. As far as I can remember, I left it
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 your dressing table, where I was arranging my things in my handbag. Because it is a crucial document
,
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that is
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 necessary to carry on my appointment day, I would be grateful if you could bring it with you on your visit to Ludhiana. As you told me that your cousin’s wedding is coming in
next
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 two days in Ludhiana,
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thus
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please bring it with you
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 I will take it from you there. I would appreciate your help. Lots of love, Prabh

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task response
Say the name of the ID in a clear way, then say why you need it. You can also ask your friend to check the table first.
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Make the return plan more clear: say when and where you will meet in Ludhiana.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear order: thanks, lost item, and return plan. Keep this order.
coherence and cohesion
Use short links such as “so”, “because”, and “also”. Do not use long lines with too many ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Change “I forget” to “I forgot” and “your cousin’s wedding is coming” to “your cousin’s wedding is in two days” for a more clear flow.
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You cover all the main parts: thanks, the lost card and its place, and how your friend can give it back.
coherence and cohesion
Each part has its own paragraph, so the reader can follow your letter with ease.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and close fit a warm letter to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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