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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table provides information about the proportions of customer expenditures on three different items in five countries during 2002.
Overall
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, these percentages exhibited different shares across the given countries; some,
such
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 as
food
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 and beverage costs in Turkey, recorded the highest figure,
whereas
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 others, like leisure or
education
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 expenditures, registered the lowest share.
However
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, the percentage of each country varied moderately among them. As the table illustrates,
food
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 and drink spending in Turkey represented the largest segment, standing at 32.14, compared with 6.63% in clothing and 4.35% in leisure costs.
This
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 was followed by Ireland, which consistituted 28.91%,
while
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 clothing and
education
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 recorded 6.43% and 2.21, respectively. Spain ranked
third,
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which reached18.80% in the
food
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 group;
in addition
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, footwear represented 6.51%, and leisure registered 1.98% as the lowest figure in
this
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 category. Fourthly, People in Italy who paid for
food
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 were at 16.36%; meanwhile, the clothing figure was the maximum at 9% and only 3.20% of
education
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.
Finally
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, Swedish consumers spent 15.77% on
food
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 and drinks, taking into account that in the clothing group it was the least at 5.40%, whilst 3.22% came from
education
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 costs.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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