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Your friend recently came to your birthday party and bought you an expensive present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • thank your friend • explain how useful the present is • arrange to meet up with your friend sometime soon You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear……………………,

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Dear Parmeet, Thank you for joining my birthday party
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 week. During the celebration, I did not get a chance to talk with you. That's the reason I am writing
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 letter. I would like to thank you for your generous gift. It is really useful for me; I was looking forward to buying the latest Apple Watch. It is really a great gift.
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 watch will help me track my steps, which will help me lose weight.
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 that, it has many unique features
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 as heartbeat monitoring and sleep tracking, which are going to be helpful in maintaining good health. Let's catch up
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 weekend? There is a new cafe that
opened
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 on the main street. It has great coffee and mouth-watering food. Let me know and suggest a time you are available so I can make reservations. Take care, g

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task response
Say more about why this watch is right for you. For example, explain how it will help with your daily exercise plan.
task response
Make the meeting plan a little more clear. Give a day and a time, then ask your friend if it is OK.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: thanks, use of the gift, then meeting plans. Add simple links such as “Also” or “For this reason” to make the flow even smoother.
coherence and cohesion
Use a full name in the closing, not only “g”. For example: “Best wishes, [Your name]”.
task response
You answer all parts of the letter: you thank your friend, explain how the gift will help you, and ask to meet soon.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one clear main point, so the letter is easy to read.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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