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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir, Congratulations
for
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on
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 receiving the best local newspaper award of the year. I have heard that you are providing an award to the social worker who did the best work to help our community in the past
one
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apply
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year. I have a
suggession
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suggestion
 for you if you would like to consider it. In my opinion, Darshan mehta who lives in the
visinity
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vicinity
 of my
house
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house,
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 is the most suitable person for
this
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privilage
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privilege
. He has been helping poor people with prividing food, drinks, shelters and jobs for the past 5 years. He runs an NGO which
offer
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offers
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 yoga, cooking and sewing classes for free. The organisation has an indoor gym which offers free drop-in programs. I would recommend you to offer him the best social worker of the
scarborough
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Scarborough
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 award
by
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for
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 his
noticable
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notable
 contributions
toward
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to
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 our society. Thank you & regards, Saumil

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Name the award in a clear way. For example, say why he should get the Community Helper Award.
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Give one or two clear examples of how his work has helped local people.
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Use the right letter start: “Dear Sir or Madam,”. Do not add congratulations, as this is not needed for the task.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a simple order: say who you suggest, explain what he does, then say which award he should get.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links such as “First,” “Also,” and “For this reason,” to join your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
End in a more formal way, such as “Yours faithfully,” followed by your name.
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You suggest a clear person and explain many ways he helps poor people in the area.
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You include an award idea, so you answer all main parts of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has clear paragraphs, and each paragraph has a main purpose.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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