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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought in supermarkets in 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008.

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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought in supermarkets in 3 European countries in 1998 and 2008.
The bar charts compare the percentages of food and
goods
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 purchased in
supermarkets
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 in three European countries, namely
Country
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 1,
Country
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 2 and
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 3, in 1998 and 2008.
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, the proportions of both foods and
goods
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 purchased in
supermarkets
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 in three countries over the period.
Country
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 1 experienced the most substantial growth and recorded the highest figures for both categories in 2008,
whereas
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Country
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 3 consistently had the lowest figures. Looking first at foods purchased in
supermarkets
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,
Country
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 1 saw the most pronounced increase
with
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 the quadrupling from 10% in 1998 to 40% in 2008.
Country
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 2 rose slowly from 25% in 1998 to 30% in 2008. Meanwhile,
Country
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 3 had the lowest figures in both years, increasing slightly from just 5% in 1998 to 10% in 2008. Regarding
goods
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,
Country
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 1
recored
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recorded
 the largest climb, with the percentage of
goods
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 bought in
supermarkets
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rose
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 steeply from approximately 18% in 1998 to 60% in 2008. In
Country
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 2, the figure increased
significant
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significantly
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 from 40% in 1998 to 50% in 2008.
Country
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 3 again had the lowest proportion,
although
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it
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 figure doubled from 5% in 1998 to 10% in 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, supermarkets, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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