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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map provides information about the proposed three different sites for a leisure centre,
while
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 the majority of
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area
Correct article usage
the area
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 is covered with herbs and trees.
Overall
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, these locations exhibited different surroundings; some
area
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,
such
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site
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as site
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 B, is positioned in the
residental
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residential
area
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,
whereas
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 others, like
C
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the C
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zone
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, is palced within a forested
area
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.
However
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, the distance among these zones varied moderately. As the map illustrates,
zone
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 A looked like an energy station, whilst the riverbank runs alongside it;
in
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addition
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addition,
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 there is a paved road leading to it.
The location
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Location
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 B seemed to be a
residental
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residential
 place
which
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apply
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located between
site
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sites
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 A and C, taking into account that the paved road at
this
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 point is divided into two roads.
On the other hand
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, the C
zone
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filled
Verb problem
is filled
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 with trees and herbs, but it is close to location B and far from
emissions
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the emissions
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came
Wrong verb form
coming
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 from
zone
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 A;
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 there is no paved road to reach.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, zone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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