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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa

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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa
The map provides information about the two proposed sites for a shopping mall, detailing the placement of the
golf
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 course, industrial zone, city centre, and housing area.
Overall
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, these places exhibit different distances from one another;
for instance
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, the S2 site is near the industrial estate,
whereas
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 the S1
location
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 is close to the
golf
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 course.
However
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, the distances among these sites vary moderately. As the map illustrates, the
golf
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 zone is near the S1
location
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, which is located to the north-east of it, whilst it is far from the S2
location
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 on the east side. Meanwhile, the city centre is placed in the middle, which is close to both the S1 and S2 sites. Unlike the
golf
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 zone, the industrial estate is positioned close to the S2
location
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 on the south-west, and far from the S1
location
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 on the north-west.
On the other hand
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, the riverbank runs alongside the
golf
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 and S1 zones,
whereas
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 it runs through the city centre.
In addition
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, the railway and paved roads are found throughout the map, which connect all the zones together.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words golf, location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city planners
  • site
  • residential area
  • access
  • customers
  • parking
  • space
  • central
  • foot traffic
  • community
  • engagement
  • schools
  • parks
  • local
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