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You answer both parts of the question: why people do not care enough, and how to make them care more. However, your ideas are very short and are not fully explained. Give two clear reasons, such as not learning about nature at school and spending too much time online. Then explain each reason.
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Your main idea about carelessness is useful, but some sentences are hard to understand. Say clearly what people do not know, why they do not know it, and what may happen because of this.
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Your example about groups in Algeria is relevant. Make it more clear: explain what these groups do, such as clean-up days, talks at schools, or social media posts, and say how this helps old and young people.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an opening, two main parts, and an ending. This is a good basic plan. Make each main part one clear paragraph with one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words in a clear way: 'First', 'Also', 'For example', and 'As a result'. Do not use long link phrases when the sentence after them is not clear.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas stop too soon, for example 'Firstly a lot of there'. Finish every sentence and check that it has a clear subject and verb. This will make your writing much easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Your ending repeats the question but does not sum up the main points. End by naming the reasons and the best ways to help people care about the natural world.
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You include ideas about pollution, social media, experts, and local groups. These ideas fit the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraph breaks and words such as 'To begin with', 'In terms of', 'For instance', and 'In conclusion' to show the order of your ideas.
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The Algeria example shows that you try to give a real example, not only a general idea.
Fully explain your ideas
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