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Many people in cities live alone or in small family units instead of with extended family. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
In modern society, life has changed a great deal, especially in the city.
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 includes how
people
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 live. Some
people
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 believe that the small family is common.
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, others believe that the large family is difficult.
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, both views have significant points.
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Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, in terms of the advantages,
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 the primary view,
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 the given information, there are many significant benefits.
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,
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 the Kuwait City Report, 90% of
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 prefer small home.
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 is
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 many positive reasons. Decreasing of the cost is the main positive point.
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, The money is saved.
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, the food.
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 there are many features,
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 prefer large home.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, in terms of the disadvantages,
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 the secondary view,
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 the given data, there are many dramatic drawbacks.
First,
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according to
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 the Kuwait Green Future Report, 90% of
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 prefer long family.
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 is
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 many reasons. The negative lifestyle is one of the main reasons. The school way needs high organisation.
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the cost is high.
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, life becomes difficult.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 the advantages and disadvantages,
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 the given data, there are many significant benefits.
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, there are major dramatic drawbacks.
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, both views have significant marks.
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, the government recommends
people
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 follow the right tips for positive results and best life.
According to
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 the given data, I believe that a small home is perfect.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph: say if this is mainly positive or mainly negative. Keep this same view in all parts of the essay.
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Write about living alone or in small family groups, not only about small and large homes. Explain effects such as lower cost, more freedom, less help, or more loneliness.
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Do not use reports or numbers that are not in the question. The task gives no data. Use real, clear examples instead, such as a young worker who lives near work but has less daily help from family.
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Develop each main idea. After you state a point, explain why it happens and how it makes city life better or worse.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, first reason, second reason, conclusion. Make each body paragraph focus on one clear idea.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating phrases such as "according to the given data" and "there are many significant benefits." These words do not add meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links: "For example," "This means that," "However," and "As a result." Make sure the next sentence clearly follows the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same key words as the question: "live alone," "small family unit," and "extended family." This will make your ideas easier to follow.
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You discuss both good and bad sides, and your final paragraph gives your own view.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two main body parts, and a conclusion. Words like "Firstly," "On the other hand," and "In conclusion" help show the order of ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • live independently
  • small family unit
  • extended family
  • urban lifestyle
  • limited living space
  • high housing costs
  • personal privacy
  • greater independence
  • emotional support
  • social isolation
  • feel a sense of loneliness
  • share household responsibilities
  • childcare support
  • financial burden
  • care for elderly relatives
  • close family ties
  • a support network
  • busy working lives
  • maintain family relationships
  • outweigh the disadvantages
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