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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
The bar chart compares the number of
hours
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teachers
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 spent teaching at primary, lower-secondary and upper-secondary schools in
Japan
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,
Spain
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,
Iceland
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 and the
USA
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 in 2001.
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,
teachers
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 in the
USA
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 spent the greatest number of
hours
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 teaching at all three educational levels,
whereas
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 those in
Japan
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 generally recorded the lowest
figures
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. In all four countries, teaching
hours
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 increased with the
level
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 of education, with upper-secondary
teachers
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 working the longest
hours
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. Regarding primary education, the
USA
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 recorded the highest figure, at approximately 750
hours
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, followed by
Spain
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 at 650
hours
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.
Japan
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 and
Iceland
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 had lower
figures
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, at around 600 and 580
hours
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respectively
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. A similar pattern can be observed at the lower-secondary
level
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, where
teachers
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 in the
USA
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 spent about 1,000
hours
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, compared with 750
hours
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 in
Spain
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. The corresponding
figures
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 for
Japan
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 and
Iceland
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 were approximately 650 and 600
hours
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. At the upper-secondary
level
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, the
USA
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 again ranked
first,
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with roughly 1,200 teaching
hours
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 per year.
Spain
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 and
Iceland
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 recorded considerably lower but similar
figures
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, at around 900
hours
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 each,
while
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Japan
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 had the lowest figure, at approximately 700
hours
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.
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, the gap between the
USA
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 and the other countries was particularly pronounced at
this
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level
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, teachers, japan, spain, iceland, usa, figures, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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