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The topic of renewable energy is widely discussed these days. What are the main reasons behind the increasing use of renewable energy sources, and is this trend a positive or negative development for the environment?

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Introduction
In recent years, many people around the world
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renewable
energy
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. There are several advantages and disadvantages of using renewable
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 for the environment. I will discuss
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 essay,  and I completely agree with
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 trend because it can bring several benefits
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 the ecosystem.
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The main reason why individuals these days are more interested in renewable energies
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 is that many research institutions have studied
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how people
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 as sunlight, wind , and water waves to protect the Earth .
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, governments allocate funds to support these institutions.
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 conduct many experiments to
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 renewable
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 in different fields. A lot of water sensors
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 solar panels or wind turbines as a source of
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, many big institutions
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 install solar cells on roofs or walls to reduce the electricity bills .
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, sustainable
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 is limited in specific
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 it needs sunlight
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also
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 requires a lot of money for installation or maintenance .
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, governments should encourage their citizens to
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 renewable
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 because it reduces emotion gases of traditional devices that effects on global warming.
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,several
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 warn people of continuing dependence on devices that consume a large amount of fuel.
Conclusion
In conclusion , I prefer renewable
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 to fuel or traditional sources of
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, because I am interested in research about renewable
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 to preserve the Earth and the ecosystem within it.

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Answer both parts more fully. Give clear main reasons for the rise of clean energy, such as less dirty air, lower power costs, and help from government. Then say clearly why the change is good or bad for the environment.
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Keep the focus on the environment. The point about high cost and need for sun or wind is useful, but explain how these limits may affect the environment, or make this point shorter.
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Use more clear examples. For example, say that solar power can cut the use of coal, so less harmful gas goes into the air.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: first body part for reasons people use clean energy; second body part for why it is a good or bad change for the environment. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with one clear main idea. Some ideas now move quickly from research, to water sensors, to bills, to limits. Group like ideas together.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words like “In addition”, “However”, and “As a result” should show a clear link with the sentence before them. Add a space after commas and full stops for easier reading.
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Make the last part sum up your answer, not your own interest in research. Restate the main reasons and your view of the effect on the environment.
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You give a clear view that renewable energy is a good change, and you link it to protecting the Earth.
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You include useful real-world points, such as solar panels, wind power, government funds, and lower power bills.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an opening, a main body, and a closing, so the reader can see the basic shape of your answer.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use link words to join ideas, such as “In addition”, “On the other hand”, and “As a result”.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • depletion
  • carbon emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • solar energy
  • wind power
  • hydroelectric power
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • energy security
  • renewable energy sources
  • environmental impact
  • finite resources
  • investment
  • efficient
  • cost-effective
  • adoption
  • political stability
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