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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or buildings they live in. What are the reasons of this? How can people research this?

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Introduction
Nowadays, people show keen interest in exploring the history of their residential buildings. In
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 in the upcoming paragraphs.
Body paragraph 1
To commence with,
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 folks are curious about knowing who owned these buildings before and how the development occurred over time. They
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 try to figure out if their houses have some cultural and historical significance.
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, if their place belonged to an eminent personality or
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 to any important event of the past. Since a house can remain standing for decades or even for centuries, owners may want to know about
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 untold stories of it.
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,
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 curiosity among individuals may lead to the research of the past.
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There are different methods that can assist with the research
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 of the past records, old newspapers and books. People can find various valuable clues related to their questions. They can
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online websites, as these can
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 provide useful pieces of information.
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, taking or interviewing the elderly residents can help to some extent. Because they have been living their lives for many decades, they may be able to tell about historical backgrounds.
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, with the help of these methods, folks can recognise the importance of their houses.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the eagerness to explore history often leads to valuable
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. People can do
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 by consulting historical and archaeological records.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task. To make the ideas stronger, give a fuller reason for each point. For example, people may want to know if a house has a past link to a well-known person, or if this may affect its value or future work on the house.
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Your ways to find information are useful, but explain how each one works. Say that people can check land records, old maps, local papers, or ask a local history group. This makes the answer more clear and complete.
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Use a more exact example. Instead of only saying an 'eminent personality', explain that a family might find an old news story showing that a famous writer once lived there.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. Keep this plan, but make the first paragraph shorter and more direct. The words 'in the upcoming paragraphs' are not needed.
coherence and cohesion
Group close ideas together. In the first main paragraph, first write about past owners, then about important events, and then give one example. This will make the paragraph easier to follow.
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Use link words with care. You use 'Therefore', 'Additionally', and 'Hence' well, but do not use them only to end every idea. Sometimes a short, direct sentence will sound more natural.
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Make the final paragraph match the body more closely. It should mention records, old papers, online sources, and older local people, not only historical and archaeological records.
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You deal with both the reasons people are interested and the ways they can learn about a building’s past.
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The example of a house linked to an important person or past event is on-topic and helps explain the reason for research.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because each main paragraph has one clear job: reasons first, then ways to research.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are present, and the main ideas are set out in a clear order.
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