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Write a letter to the local council regarding the plan of replacement of a library with a supermarket. You need to write the following: * Where did you get this information? * The disadvantages of having a supermarket instead of a library. * Importance of having a library.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to show my concern regarding the plan
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 a library with a supermarket in Balewal. I got
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 information from a local newspaper, The Hindustan Times. I
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read
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 important article two days ago.
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 plan dismays me. In my opinion, there would be some disadvantages
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 establishing a grocery store there. The roads in
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 area, where the library is located, are too congested. The introduction of the hypermarket there
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 may result in heavy traffic jams.
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, the increasing number of vehicles on the roads will cause air and noise pollution.
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,
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 public library is suitable
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according to
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 the surroundings. Having a reading room
nearby
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 our hometown gives an opportunity to local residents to spend their leisure time in a productive way.
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, school and college students are highly dependent on
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 resource centre, because they can study in a peaceful environment and can use different study materials
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 their needs. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours sincerely, Prabh.

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task response
State more clearly what you want the council to do, for example, ask them to keep the library or find another place for the supermarket.
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Add one or two more clear points about why the library is important, such as free books, computer use, or help for people who cannot buy study books.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Use a stronger link between the two main parts, such as “For these reasons, the library should remain open.”
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The second paragraph can focus on traffic, while the next can focus on the library and its users.
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You answer all the main points: where you got the news, problems with a supermarket, and why the library matters.
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The tone is polite and right for a letter to the local council.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, main body, and polite ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use useful links such as “Moreover”, “On the other hand”, and “Additionally” to guide the reader.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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