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You were absent from an important event held by the company you work for. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Apologize for your absence and explain the reasoning. Explain why you had to be at the other event. Explain what you will do to catch up.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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apologize
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 to you, because I was absent from a recent important event held at the hospital. I could not attend it, because I went to my university on that day. As you know, I was pursuing a diploma in Infection Control
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 my hospital duties. Recently, my results were released. So, my university organised a convocation to distribute the certificates among students.
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 event was
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 crucial for me to attend, as
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I am planning to join the Infection Control team at the hospital.
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, on that day, I attended the convocation. The event
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 that I missed at the workplace
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 was related to the use of an AED device. I am aware of the fact that it was quite essential for me, as a staff nurse. With the help of the AED device, we can easily handle an emergency condition
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 as cardiac arrest.
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, I asked my nursing supervisor for her help, and she agreed to teach me how to use it step by step. I hope you will understand my situation. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Rohit.

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task response
State the name or time of the company event more clearly. This will make the reason for your apology easier to understand.
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Add a clear plan to catch up, such as a day and time when you will learn how to use the AED.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order. To make links smoother, use fewer repeated words like “event” and “attended”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each part focused on one main point. The last main part can first say what you missed, then say exactly how you will catch up.
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You answer all the main points: you say sorry, explain why you went to the university, and say how you will learn the AED use.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with a clear start, middle, and end. Each main part has a useful purpose.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • apologize
  • sorry
  • absence
  • event
  • company
  • manager
  • reason
  • due to
  • had to
  • urgent
  • family
  • medical
  • personal
  • could not
  • attend
  • other
  • important
  • catch up
  • notes
  • minutes
  • presentation
  • slides
  • update
  • plan
  • tasks
  • work
  • next steps
  • talk
  • team
  • follow up
  • schedule
  • arrange
  • meeting
  • learn
  • help
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