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The line graph illustrates the migration figures, measured in millions, for individuals moving from rural areas to urban centers in three distinct countries over the period from 2000 to 2025, including future projections.

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The line graph illustrates the migration figures, measured in millions, for individuals moving from rural areas to urban centers in three distinct countries over the period from 2000 to 2025, including future projections.
The chart gives information about migration in three different countries (Iran, Indonesia and Russia) from villages to cities during a period. ​
Overall
Linking Words
, the figures for Russia and Iran reached
peak
Correct determiner usage
their peak
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 after starting from
it's
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their
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 initial. Meanwhile, ~~~ number of people who were leaving their
home
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homes
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 saw a significant growth in Indonesia. ​In more detail, there was a slight growth in Russia from approximately 15 to 70 before reached it's top in roughly 87 in
2025
Punctuation problem
2025,
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while
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 individuals moving from rural places to cities ~~~ was at its lowest point at almost 8 in 2000,
this
Linking Words
 figure experienced a dramatic growth peaking at 95 in 2025. ​Notably, the majority of people didn't prefer to leave their house in Indonesia
,
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;
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therefore
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,
migration
Correct article usage
the migration
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 rate saw a slight increase to 20 from
it
Correct determiner usage
its
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 initial 10 in 2000. After a
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while
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while,
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this
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 figure
also
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 witnessed a mild increase from 20 to 30 in 2020 before
remained
Wrong verb form
remaining
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 unchanged at 30 during five year period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • urban centres
  • migration figures
  • measured in millions
  • the overall trend
  • a steady increase
  • a gradual decline
  • a sharp rise
  • a slight fluctuation
  • remain relatively stable
  • reach a peak
  • fall to
  • rise from ... to ...
  • overtake another country
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest level
  • a significant gap
  • future projections
  • is expected to
  • is projected to
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