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In many countries today, crime novels and tv crimes dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and tv shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction tv crime dramas?

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Introduction
Nowadays
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 a majority of nations,
crime
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ficion
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fiction
 books and tv crimes series are attracting more and more people, and it is because they give us a
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chance
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 to learn more about the
lives
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as
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of
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 detectives, polices and thieves that we are curious about. I believe
this
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 is a great opportunity for everyone who
lives
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 their
lives
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 regularly and just wants to experience the other exciting
live
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lives
 happening in the
crime
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ficion
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fiction
 world.
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People are
drown
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drawn
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 to
different
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the different
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lives
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 of
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others.
This
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 is
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 the fact that we can personate ourselves into the scene as
a
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 officer or detective and
to
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try to investigate a
crime
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.
This
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 happens all the time when we watch
"CSI"
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the "CSI"
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tv
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 series or
novels
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and
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 we will imagine we are a part of the world, the characters and discover .
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Living in a world with dangers is
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 different
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from
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 the life we have now. We can learn how to think differently and
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learn
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 the specific things which could happen
in our
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on a
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 daily basis.
For example
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,
logic
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logical
 thinking is usually performed during
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apply
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crime
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 scenes in order to close a case and to help us think outside the box.
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Also
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 we will get familiar with stealing, car accitdents and we
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 be able to expect as they all do in the movies and
novels
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so
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 we won't feel scared or nervous when it actually happens in our
live
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lives
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Conclusion
In conclusion, I think
crime
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novels
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 are great to learn more about the dangers
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is
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seldom
happening
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 in our
lives
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. We don't have to change our
career
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careers
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 to enjoy the excitement when we catch the
theft
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thief
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 or save the hostage in a building filled with bombs. All we have to do is just turn the
tv
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TV
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 on, or open a
crime
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 ficion
novels
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.

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task response
You answer both parts of the question: why these stories are popular and what you think of them. To make your answer stronger, give two clear reasons for their popularity, such as the wish to solve a mystery and the thrill of danger.
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Some ideas are not fully clear. For example, saying that crime shows can help people face real crime without fear is too strong. Explain that they may teach people to notice risks, but real life is different from TV.
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Develop each main idea with a clear example. The example of CSI fits well, but explain exactly how viewers follow clues and try to guess who did the crime.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an ending. Keep this shape, but make the first line of each body part state one main idea clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Use simple links such as “First”, “Also”, “For example”, “However”, and “As a result”. Do not join too many ideas in one long sentence.
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Avoid unclear words such as “they” and “this” when the reader may not know what they mean. Name the people or idea again, for example, “viewers” or “crime dramas”.
coherence and cohesion
The second body part moves from danger to logic, theft, car crashes, and fear very quickly. Focus on one point at a time, then explain it before moving on.
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You give a clear positive view of crime novels and TV crime dramas.
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The idea that viewers enjoy taking the role of a detective is relevant and interesting.
coherence and cohesion
The essay uses paragraphs, and the conclusion returns to your main opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The CSI example helps connect your point to a well-known TV crime series.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • suspense
  • mystery
  • detective
  • clue
  • solve a crime
  • criminal
  • victim
  • safe excitement
  • real life problems
  • human nature
  • keep the audience interested
  • step by step
  • bad choices
  • violent scenes
  • have a bad effect
  • becoming more popular
  • feel curious
  • want to know the ending
  • smart plot
  • social issues
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