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You were sent by your company to attend a meeting in another country, but you are not happy with the hotel your organizer booked for you. Write a letter to an organizer about the meeting details What you did not like about the hotel what you want organizer to do about it?

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about the
hotel
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 you booked for me during a meeting in another country. The meeting was about introducing a new medication to physicians on September 25 at the Green
Hotel
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 located in the city centre.
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, the services
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hotel
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the hotel
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 provided were disappointing. One of the primary problems was the parking area. The
hotel
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 did not devote enough space for guests’ vehicles, which led to guests’ dissatisfaction. Another issue was that
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 could not provide top-notch digital facilities, including an advanced projector, a microphone, and a computer, which made it difficult to efficiently present the medication. I would appreciate it if you could take appropriate actions to address the issues. I would
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 be grateful if you could contact the
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 manager and explain the problems, because these issues can have a negative impact on our customers’ imagination about our company. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
Give a little more detail about the meeting, such as why the room and its tools were important for your work.
task response
Make your request more direct. For example, ask the organizer to speak to the hotel and make sure the right tools are ready for the meeting.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: meeting details, hotel problems, and your request. Use a few more linking words, such as “As a result” or “For this reason”, to show the link between the problems and their effect.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each problem in its own short paragraph. This will make the letter easier to read.
language
Use “the hotel services were disappointing” and “the hotel could not provide” to make these phrases correct.
language
Change “our customers’ imagination about our company” to “our customers’ view of our company” for a more natural meaning.
task response
You cover all the main points: the meeting, the hotel problems, and what you want the organizer to do.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with clear paragraphs and a polite ending.
tone
Your formal greeting, polite requests, and closing are suitable for a letter to an organizer.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • arrange/arrangement
  • specifics
  • cleanliness
  • amenities
  • service
  • location
  • improve
  • solution
  • alternative
  • accommodation
  • recommendation
  • organize/organizer
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