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You went to another city for a training course and stayed at a friend’s house for a week. They have been great hosts. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, thank them for having you at their house for a week express your gratitude for their hospitality say how much you miss them

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Dear Ali, I hope you and your family are well. I’m
reach
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 out to express my appreciation
about
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for
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 your parents’ kindness during
a
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the
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 week I stayed at your home.
This
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 was a memorable experience for me, as it
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 me a lot about your
family’s
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 traditions and cultural background
while
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 spending quality time with them. I’d
also
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 like to express my gratitude for your
family’s
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 hospitality. Your mother
was
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really impressed me, particularly with
meals
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the meals
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 she prepared every day. Your father
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 showed how humanity can make life more beautiful, when you
led
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 a hand to someone
,
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 who
need
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 help.
I’m
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 truly miss moments, which we
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 together, especially the time we went to your
family’s
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 garden. I was genuinely overwhelmed with anticipation
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 when I saw the garden’s breathtaking natural beauty. Thank you again for your
family’s
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 kindness. I hope to see you again as soon as possible. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
Thank your friend more directly, not only their parents. Add one clear line about how their help made your week easy and happy.
task response
Say more clearly that you miss your friend. For example: “I miss our talks and the time we spent in the garden.”
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end. However, some ideas are hard to follow because of word form mistakes. Use short, clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point: thanks for the stay, thanks for the family’s help, and what you miss.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words such as “Also”, “Because”, and “Finally” to join your ideas.
task response
You thank the family, talk about their kind help, and say that you miss time with them.
coherence and cohesion
Your greeting and closing are warm and fit a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The garden detail makes the letter feel real and personal.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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