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You went to another city for a training course and stayed at a friend’s house for a week. They have been great hosts. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter thank them for having you at their house for a week express your gratitude for their hospitality say how much you miss them

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Dear Ali, I hope you and your family are well. I’m reaching out to express my appreciation for your parents’ kindness during the week I stayed at your home.
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 traditions and cultural background
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 spending quality time with them. I’d
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 like to express my gratitude for your
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 hospitality. Your mother really impressed me, particularly with the meals she prepared every day. Your father
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 showed how humanity can make life more beautiful, when you lend a hand to someone
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 who needs help. I truly miss the moments
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 which we spent together, especially the time we went to your
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 garden. I was genuinely overwhelmed with anticipation
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 when I saw the garden’s breathtaking natural beauty. Thank you again for your
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 kindness. I hope to see you again as soon as possible. Take care, Mohammadreza

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Thank your friend more directly, not only their parents. Say clearly that you are thankful for staying in their home for a week.
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Add one short line about the training course. This will make the reason for your stay clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use simple links such as “Also”, “Because of this”, and “Finally” to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. For example, put food and help in one paragraph, and your time in the garden in another.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences can be made shorter. For example: “Your father showed me that life is better when we help people in need.”
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You thank the family, speak about their warm care, and say that you miss your time together.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and fit a letter to a friend.
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The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a clear main subject.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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