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You are having a graduation party next Sunday evening. You have invited over 25 people to celebrate in your garden, which may continue late into the night. Write a letter to your elderly neighbor. In your letter: ·       Explain what will be happening ·       Offer your apologies in advance ·       Invite him to join the celebration You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Kulligowski

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 Johnson, I am writing to let you know that I will be holding a graduation party in my garden next Sunday evening to celebrate
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 special occasion with my family and friends. I have invited more than 25 people to the celebration, so there may be some noise, particularly as the party could continue until late at night. There will be music, food and various activities in the garden.
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 I will do my best to keep the noise to a reasonable level, I understand that it may cause some inconvenience, especially because you prefer a quiet environment. I would like to sincerely apologise in advance for any disturbance
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 celebration may cause. I will
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 make sure that my guests behave responsibly and that the garden is cleaned after the party. I would be delighted if you could join us for the celebration. It would be wonderful to have you there, and you would be most welcome to come at any time during the evening. I hope you will understand and accept my apologies. Yours sincerely, Tina

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task response
Say the date or time more clearly, such as “from 7 p.m. next Sunday”. This gives Mr. Kulligowski all the key facts.
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Use the name in the task: “Dear Mr. Kulligowski,”. Also make sure the name in the letter is the same.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. You could make the link from the noise to your sorry words even smoother by starting the next part with “For this reason,”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep using short, clear links such as “also”, “although”, and “so”. They help the reader follow your letter.
task response
You explain the party, say sorry before it happens, and ask your neighbor to come. All main parts are included.
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The tone is polite and kind. Your words show care for an older neighbor.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Each paragraph has one main point.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are suitable for a polite letter to a neighbor.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduation celebration
  • garden party
  • next Sunday evening
  • friends and relatives
  • a small gathering
  • music and laughter
  • continue late into the night
  • cause some disturbance
  • apologise in advance
  • any inconvenience
  • keep the noise to a minimum
  • turn the music down
  • be considerate of neighbours
  • park responsibly
  • contact me directly
  • a warm invitation
  • join us for a drink
  • help yourself to some food
  • meet my family and friends
  • celebrate this special occasion
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