There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

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Introduction
Nowadays, many married
couples
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prefer not to have
children
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, and
this
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trend is increasing around the world. I believe
couples
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without
children
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become more career focused and
face
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less stress;
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, they obtain limited support during
elderly
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their elderly
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and
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years and
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often come across
with
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more broken
relationship
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relationships
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.
Body paragraph 1
Couples
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without
children
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face
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less
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fewer
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distractions in life and
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more
in
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their careers. To elaborate, these
couples
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do not
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about child
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responsibilities
, including
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kids
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schooling, feeding, and playing.
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, they become less distracted and get more time for
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their job
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, married people without
kids
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during their spare time often go to visit different countries, and enjoy their life more
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fully
because they do not have
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with them to look after them.
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The main drawback is that these
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couples
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couples,
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when
become
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they become
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old
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face
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more limited support compared with
couples
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with
children
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, elderly people without
children
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face
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more social isolation and financial stress because they do not have anyone to lookafter tham, and
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them financially.
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,
couples
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without
kids
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face
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more chances of divorce. The reason behind
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that
children
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make relationship more stronger, and without
them
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them,
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couples
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seprate
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separate
easily as they do not
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worry
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about
children
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, in Pakistan, most
couples
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without
kids
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get divorced after
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a couple
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of years because they do not have shared child
resposibilities
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responsibilities
to keep the relationship alive.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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couples
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without
children
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have more time for career and enjoyment, limited elderly support and more chances of divorce are the main disadvantages.

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task response
You answer both parts of the task: you give good points and bad points for couples who do not have children. Your main ideas are clear, but some need more care. For example, saying that children make a marriage stronger is not always true. Explain that this may happen for some couples, but it depends on the people and their relationship.
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Give more full support for each main idea. In the first body part, explain how more free time can help a person study, work longer hours, or move for a job. In the second body part, explain why old people without children may need to plan for care and money.
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Use examples that are clear and not too broad. The example about divorce in Pakistan is very strong and may not be true for most people. A safer example is a couple who must pay for home care when they are old because they do not have close family help.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: an opening, one part for good points, one part for bad points, and an ending. Keep this plan, but make each paragraph start with one clear main idea and then add two or three related sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. Words such as “For example”, “As a result”, “In addition”, and “However” can help, but do not use them only at the start of a sentence. Make sure the next sentence clearly builds on the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because of word form and grammar issues. For example, write “Couples without children have fewer distractions and can focus more on their careers.” Shorter, clearer sentences will make your ideas easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “couples without children” in many sentences. You can also use “these couples”, “they”, or “child-free couples” when the meaning is clear.
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You give a clear view of both the good and bad sides, including work, free time, support in old age, and marriage.
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The essay stays on the topic and gives reasons for each main point.
coherence and cohesion
The opening states your main view, and the ending brings the main points together.
coherence and cohesion
The two body paragraphs have a clear purpose: one looks at good points and the other looks at bad points.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • childfree
  • personal freedom
  • financial stress
  • raising children
  • nurturing the relationship
  • societal pressure
  • stigma
  • support network
  • companionship
  • legacy
  • regret
  • intimate bond
  • norm
  • invest in experiences
  • close-knit
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