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The bar chart below gves information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the whole world and in fdifferent part of the world in three years.

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Introduction
The bar graph compares the proportion of
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population
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the population
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 in urban areas in Africa, Asia, Europe, Latin
America
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, North
America
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, and
in
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the whole
world
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 in 1950, 2007, and 2030.
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Overall
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, in all given parts of the
world
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 and in the whole
world
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population
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 ratio in urban areas is relatively increasing. In Africa, Asia, and
whole
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the whole
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world
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,
urban
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the urban
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population
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 is
least
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the least
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 popular throughout the periods,
whereas
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 in Latin
America
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 and North
America
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popualtion
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population
 rates are
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 similar, despite some fluctuations.
Conclusion
When exploring the data, in
whole
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the whole
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world
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,
urban
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the urban
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population
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 was only 29% in 1950
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this
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 rate increased significantly to 49% and 60%
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 in 2007 and 2030
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, respectively.
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 As compared to 1950, in Africa and Asia, in 2030 urban
population
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 increased by three times, 51% and 54% respectively. In Europe, around 50% people were living in villages, followed by 72% in 2007, and 78% in 2030. In terms of Latin
America
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, figures rose from 42% to 76%, in 2950 and 2007, before rising
significanlty
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significantly
 to 84% in the final given year. North
America
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 shwoed similar trend with relatively small fluctuations across the periods.

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Give a clear overview with the main changes: all areas rise, North America stays the highest, and Africa and Asia stay the lowest. Do not say there are changes down and up when all the figures go up.
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Check every number and year very carefully. For example, write 1950, not 2950. Also, use the exact figures from the chart for Europe and North America.
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Compare key areas more clearly. Say which area is highest and lowest in each year, and point out the large rise in Latin America.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, overview, first detail paragraph, and second detail paragraph. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Group similar areas together, such as Africa and Asia, then Europe, Latin America, and North America. This helps the reader see the main links.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as "in contrast", "while", "by 2030", and "meanwhile". Avoid long sentences with too many ideas.
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Use the same words for the main topic. Prefer "the percentage of people living in urban areas" instead of changing between "urban population", "population ratio", and "rates".
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You describe all the main areas and all three years.
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You include an overview and note the general rise in urban living.
coherence and cohesion
The report has clear paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and detail.
coherence and cohesion
You use some useful time words, such as "in 1950", "in 2007", and "in 2030".
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