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You have recently missed a project deadline which resulted in your company losing an important client. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: oapologize for what happened oexplain why you missed the deadline otell him/her how you will avoid this situation in future

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Dear Mr Hashemi, I am writing to apologise
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 missing a significant
project
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, leading to the loss of an important client.
This
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 had a negative impact on our company’s reputation. Actually, I was suffering from a serious flue, which reduced my concentration on the
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.
As a result
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, I could not manage the deadline
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and could not complete the
project
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, I could not reach out to Mr Hadavi in order to help me with the
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, as he travelled overseas and his phone was out of service. I promise that in the next
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, I will plan carefully, and strive to complete
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project
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 in advance in order to have enough
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 to evaluate information critically and submit the
project
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, if I am faced with a problem, I will promptly inform you of the issue to prevent any following challenges. I apologise again for the inconvenience, and I hope to do my best in future to offset the mistake. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
Answer all three parts clearly. Say sorry, give the main reason, and give a clear plan for the future. Add one or two real steps, such as telling your manager early and asking for help sooner.
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Use more exact words. Say “project deadline” instead of “significant project”, and say “flu” instead of “flue”.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: sorry, reason, then future plan. Make the links smoother by using simple words such as “because”, “so”, “also”, and “therefore”.
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Keep each paragraph on one main point. The second paragraph has two reasons, so you can make them easier to read by starting the second reason with “Also”.
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Use a more natural closing line, such as “I will work hard to make up for this mistake.”
task response
You cover every part of the task: you say sorry, explain the late work, and give plans for future work.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end. The greeting and closing are polite and suitable for a manager.
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