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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

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The line graph gives information on the
number
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 of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, it is evident that the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 substantially increased throughout the period.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of cruise ship
visitors
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 experienced significant growth, making it the leading group visiting the island
at the end
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 of the period. The
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships rose from around 250,000 to 500,000 between 2010 and 2011 before reducing to about 250,000 in 2012. Afterwards, the
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 sharply grew from around 250,000 to 2
million
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 in 2017.
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, the
number
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 of individuals staying on the island remained largely unchanged at around 750,000 from 2010 to 2011, and
then
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 considerably increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013.
Following
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this
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, the
figure
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 stood at 1.5
million
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 between 2013 and 2015 before decreasing slightly to 1.25
million
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 in 2016.
Thereafter
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, the
figure
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 rebounded to 1.5
million
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 in 2017. Meanwhile, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 steadily increased from 1
million
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 to around 2.75
million
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 between 2010 and 2015, after which
remained
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it remained
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 stable at around 2.75
million
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 until 2016.
Thereafter
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, the
figure
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 rose to 3.5
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, figure, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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