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Band 1

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Introduction
It is often argued that towns and capital to have
puplic
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public
 outdoor
zone
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zones
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 like squares and parks . In my opinion i agree with
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Body paragraph 1
On the one hand , large green space it's essintial for the environment and
helthear
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healthy
 for people to reduce pollution . Families with
childreen
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children
 have
picnic
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picnics
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 in these places to relax and
fun
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have fun
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also
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 it's
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beneficial
 to their health .
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 , doing excersice its important for
there
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 health .
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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 , puplic outdoors spaces
makes
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 towns and
center
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centres
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 more attractive for all
resident
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residents
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 and tourist wich can have positive economic benefits for the local
business
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businesses
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Conclusion
In
conculsion
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conclusion
, large spaces in cities and downtown are
benefit
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beneficial
 for all economic people .

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task response
State your view more clearly in the first part. Say that you agree strongly, or agree to some extent, and keep this view through the whole essay.
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Add more detail to each main idea. Explain how parks cut pollution, help health, and bring money to local shops. Your ideas are good, but they need more support.
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Use a more real example. For example, say that a city park gives children a safe place to play and brings visitors to cafés near it.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an ending. Make the links between ideas clearer with words such as “First”, “Also”, “As a result”, and “For this reason”.
coherence and cohesion
Do not use “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” unless you show two different sides of the topic. Here, both parts support the same view, so use “First” and “Second” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main point. Start with the point, explain it, then give an example before moving to the next point.
coherence and cohesion
Write a stronger ending. Repeat your main view and sum up the two key reasons: better health and a better city for people and shops.
task response
You give a clear positive view and include useful reasons: health, less pollution, family time, and help for local business.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because it has separate paragraphs and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “For example” and “In conclusion”, to guide the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public outdoor spaces
  • community events
  • social cohesion
  • community engagement
  • quality of urban life
  • physical activities
  • public health and wellbeing
  • environmental benefits
  • reduce pollution
  • urban wildlife
  • aesthetic appeal
  • inclusive access
  • economic benefits
  • local businesses
  • tourists attractions
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