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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Team
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Teamwork
work
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somthing
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something
 we grew up learning how important it is ,
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however
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 some people don't feel comfortable with it . Even though
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somepeople
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some people
 prefer to
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 on school projects with a group , others would rather
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 alone .
Body paragraph 1
Ttherefore
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, working on school projects with a group gives
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 sense of belonging for the students , because they have to deal with each
others
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 sake of success for
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 project .
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 a chance of communication , and building friendships.
Body paragraph 2
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, people who prefer working alone for a project
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 have
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 sense of
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responsibility
 that tend to not envolve any kind of distraction in the sake of perfection .
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 one person who is working on a project it won't be distracted by
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 opinions and suggestions , and
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 won't deal with
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differences
 of opinion if it was a groupwork.
Conclusion
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 ,it is a complex argument wether its better to
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group
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 ,or individually
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 when it comes to a shool projects . But in my
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opinion
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 rather
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work
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 in a
groupwork wich
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group work which
 will allow me to share my thoughts and have the ability to communicate more.

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task response
You discuss both ways of working and give your own view. To make your answer stronger, explain each main point in more detail. For group work, say how students can share jobs and learn from each other. For working alone, say why one student may work faster or have more control.
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Your example is about one person not being distracted. Add a clear school project example, such as making a science report or giving a class talk. This will make your ideas more real and easy to understand.
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Make your opinion clear in the last paragraph and give one strong reason for it. For example: "I prefer group work because students can share ideas and help each other finish the work."
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an ending. Use one main idea in each body paragraph. Do not put too many different ideas in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. "Therefore" usually shows a result, so it does not fit at the start of every paragraph. You can use "On the one hand" for group work and "On the other hand" for working alone.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because of word order and missing words. Keep sentences short and clear. For example, write: "Working in a group can help students make friends."
coherence and cohesion
Check repeated words and spelling, as they can make the flow less clear. Write "teamwork", "something", "whether", "school", and "opinion" correctly.
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You answer all parts of the question: you write about group work, working alone, and your own choice.
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You give useful ideas, such as friendship and communication in groups, and focus and responsibility when working alone.
coherence and cohesion
Your main ideas are placed in separate paragraphs, so the reader can see the two sides of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as "however", "moreover", and "for instance", to connect ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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