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Some people say that there should be a single official international language. Others oppose to this idea. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Tdstui The most common way to make your
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 more profitable is by making the most profitable
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 you can make in your
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 by doing the right things and doing them in a positive manner by doing the same thing you do for others to make it profitable for yourself in your own time or your own
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 and make sure ✔️ the right decisions and the right ones for your customers and your company as a
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 to be successful and profitable for you and your
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 and to have your company in a positive and positive manner so as not just a positive and negative attitude but a positive way for the whole thing and to be successful
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 and
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 and that you can make it successful and you can make it to your goals that are in your life and you can make it happen and you will be a great 😊 happy
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 you will be happy

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task response
Write about the topic, not about how to make a business more profitable. Discuss both views: why one world language may help people, and why it may harm local languages and culture. Then clearly say what you think.
task response
Use clear main ideas with simple examples. For example, one language can help travel, study, and trade. On the other hand, local languages are part of a people’s past and way of life.
coherence and cohesion
Make a clear plan: introduction, one part for the first view, one part for the other view, your view, and a short end. Each part should have one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat the same words and ideas again and again. Your text repeats “business,” “positive,” and “profitable,” so the meaning is hard to follow. Use short, full sentences that link to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show the order of your ideas: “First,” “However,” “For example,” “In my view,” and “In the end.”
task response
You tried to write a long answer and to give a positive message about success.
coherence and cohesion
You show a wish to connect ideas with words such as “and” and “so.”
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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