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The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

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The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The maps provide information about
acess
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access
 to the city hospital by
road
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 in 2010 and 2017.
Overall
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, the
road
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connectvity
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connectivity
 to and around the hospital and the provision for transport facilities increased significantly. In 2010, the city hospital was surrounded by a ring
road
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 around it
in
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apply
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. The ring
road
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,
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was further
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further
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 was connected to the hospital
road
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runnig
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running
 down the south. Hospital
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road
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Road
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 has
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bus
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a bus
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 stop on both sides,
while
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 there
was
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is
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 an area allocated to staff and public
car
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 park next to
the
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apply
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the
bus
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 stops on the right side. The central hospital
road
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 was
then
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 linked to
city
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the city
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road
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which
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, which
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 extended to the east and the west. In 2017, the ring
road
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 and hospital
road
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 from the previous plan remained unchanged, but there was
a
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an
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 addition of two roundabouts at the northern and southern
end
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ends
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 of the hospital
road
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. A new
bus
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 station was built on
left
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the left
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 side of the hospital
road
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, and the
bus
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 stops from the earlier
laout
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layout
 were removed.
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Similarly
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Similarly,
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 to improve transport facilities, the public and
car
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 park were
seperated
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separated
.
This
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 was done by keeping
staff
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the staff
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car
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 at the same location and constructing a public
car
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 park on the eastern side of the hospital building, which was linked to the hospital by the ring
road
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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