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You have recently moved to different house. Write a letter to an English speaking, friend. In your letter. Explain why you have moved Describe the new house Invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear Jimi I’m writing to let you know that I moved to a new house located in the countryside with an outstanding view of natural beauty. As you know, I am suffering from a respiratory disease, which makes it difficult for me to live in cities with high levels of air pollution. So, I decided to relocate to the countryside, where I can enjoy fresh air and pleasant weather. The
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 is relatively large, equipped with modern facilities,
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 still maintaining its traditional features, including a fireplace. The
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 has a large garden, where I can cultivate organic agricultural products and keep livestock.
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, the
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 has a sunny balcony, exposing me to the view of natural beauty. I would like to invite you to my
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, as I know you are really keen on living in
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 homes, allowing you to take a break from a busy city lifestyle. We can
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 spend quality
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 through outdoor activities,
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 as hiking. What is your opinion about September 25? It can be a great
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 because we have enough
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 to spend
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 to together. I hope to see you as soon as possible. I look forward to hearing from you. Take care, Mohammadreza

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Explain the move in a more direct way. Say that clean air is needed for your health, then add one short detail about why this new place is good for you.
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The house is well described, but some parts sound too formal. Use more personal details, such as your room, the garden, or what you want to do with your friend there.
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Make the visit plan clearer. Ask your friend to come on 25 September and say how long they can stay or what you will do together.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason for moving, new home, and visit. Keep this order, but make each paragraph a little shorter and more focused.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating words and ideas, such as “home” and “spend time.” For example, write “we will have plenty of time together.”
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler links in a few places. “Also” can work better than “Moreover,” and “but” can work better than “while” in this friendly letter.
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You answer all three parts of the letter: why you moved, what the new house is like, and an invite for your friend.
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The reason for moving is clear and believable. The fresh air and better weather fit your health reason well.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each main point is in its own paragraph.
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Your greeting, friendly ending, and invite create a warm and suitable tone for a letter to a friend.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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