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Some people think that radio has become out-of-date, and there is no need to listen to the radio for entertainment and news. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In recent
years
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 there has been growing the
populaty
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popularity
 of music
streamings
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streaming services
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 like
spotify
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Spotify
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 and apple music. Because of that, people imagine that
radio
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 is something old and not usually. I
fortly
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firmly
 disagree, in
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revale reseaons
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reveal reasons
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Body paragraph 1
Isn't how
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dinner
 that today is more opptions envolving entertainment industry, especially music and TV,
that
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 twenty years ago.
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 nowadays we can talk about the news behind the Youtube, Spotify, reels on Instagram and tweets on X.
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 is not
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radio
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.
Radio
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have
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 an ancestral history and impact
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 society, was
use
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 in wars to fight and
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noticed
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life. Not only
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 the poor population to
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access
 real and
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verified
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 provide job and distraction for their lives.
Body paragraph 2
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, stereo and boombox are tools that
conect
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connect
 generations, young and old people. The broadcast is a media free and
acessible
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accessible
 to any person in the world, you don't need
pay
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 anything or listen
advertisements
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. The objectiv always been
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to entertain
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 people independ of polity or laws or money, across the
years
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 is mentain that essential.
Conclusion
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radio
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an
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 relevant
media
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medium
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 to
the
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society, wich cause many positive impact to life.
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doesn't
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exist
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there exist
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other
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 thing that
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 the importance of
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task response
Make your view clear in the first part: say that you disagree because radio is still useful for news, music, and people with little money.
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Give two main reasons and explain each one. For example, radio can give local news fast, and it is free for people who do not have internet.
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Use examples that prove your ideas. The points about war and poor people are not fully explained. Say how radio helps them today.
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Do not make claims that are not true. Many radio shows have ads, so say that radio is often free to listen to, but it may have ads.
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Keep the focus on the question. Do not spend too much time on the long history of radio; explain why it still matters now.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, first reason, second reason, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start each body part with one clear main idea. Then add an explanation and one example before moving to the next idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words in the right way: 'First', 'For example', 'However', 'Also', and 'In conclusion'.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because many ideas are put together. Write shorter sentences with one main idea in each sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last part stronger by restating your view and your two reasons. Avoid very general lines such as 'nothing can replace it'.
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You give a clear view that radio is still important.
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You include useful ideas about free news, music, and access for people who may not use online media.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to show both the rise of online media and the value of radio today.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • out-of-date
  • relevant
  • portability
  • rural and remote areas
  • internet access
  • sense of community
  • local engagement
  • traditional radio
  • disseminating
  • crucial information
  • demographics
  • primary source
  • familiarity
  • ease of use
  • revitalized
  • internet radio
  • podcasts
  • diverse content
  • engaged in
  • emergency situations
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