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The charts below show the resutls of a survey od adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows hoe pwoplw think the costs of adult education should be shared.

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The charts below show the resutls of a survey od adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows hoe pwoplw think the costs of adult education should be shared.
The first
chart
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 depicts the distinct reasons for
adults
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adult
education
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;
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while
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 the second graph
delinates
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delineates
 how the expenses of
youth
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education
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 are distributed. The given information is extracted from an adult
education
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 survey.
Overall
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, the bar
chart
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 illustrates that adults who are interested in subjects recorded the highest share, followed by the
youth
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wanted
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who wanted
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 to gain qualifications,
whereas
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the individual
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individuals
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 who are keen to meet people had the lowest proportion. The pie
chart
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 showcases that individuals are the main
contribitor
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contributors
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 of adult
education
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.
To begin
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 with, the bar
chart
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 displays that the primary reason why
youth
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 want to study is that they are interested in subjects,
accounted
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 for 40%, and there is a slight decline in
youth
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,
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 who studied
for
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to gain
qualifications
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qualifications,
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 recorded 38% share. Three other reasons, including students who enjoy learning, desire
for
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to improve prospects
od
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of
 promotion, and helpful for current job, experienced around 20% in each category. Individuals who are looking to change their job and want to meet people recorded 12% and 9% share, respectively. As per the second diagram, individuals will contribute to the 40% of
adults
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 educational expenses,
follwed
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followed
 by employers' 35%, and only 25% by the taxpayers
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, education, youth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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