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You would like to reduce your working hours in order to study part time. Write a letter to your boss. In your letter explain why you want to reduce your working hours say which hours you would like to work describe how your part-time studies would benefit your employer You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....................................,

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Dear Mr Hashemi, I am writing to ask you for a reduction in my work hours, as I would like to attend a
course
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Oxford University, which
is start
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 from September 25 everyday from 8 a.
m
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. to 2 p.
m
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. I would appreciate it if you could allow me to work between 4 p.
m
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. and 8 p.
m
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. from September 25,
2026
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 to November 25,
2027
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 because
this
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 timetable can enable me to take part in the
course
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while
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 performing my responsibilities in the workplace.
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, I can handle both and contribute to the company. The
course
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 is about how to apply artificial intelligence in the workplace in order to simplify tasks and increase productivity. I think the
course
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 can allow us to automate simple responsibilities, enabling employees to concentrate on productive projects. It can
also
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workplace pressure and improve job satisfaction, resulting in motivated employees and the company’s development. Thank you for your consideration and time. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
State the exact name of the course and check the course date. Write “starts” instead of “is start.” Also say more clearly how you will use the new skills in your own job.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: reason, work plan, and help for the company. To make it even clearer, keep the last part focused on one main benefit at a time.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few simple link words such as “First,” “Also,” and “As a result” to show how your ideas are linked.
task response
You answer all parts of the task. You explain why you want less work time, give clear work hours, and show how the course can help the company.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with clear paragraphs and a polite opening and ending.
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