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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2017, 2011 and 2015.

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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2017, 2011 and 2015.
The chart gives information about
number
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the number
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 of US
households
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 (in
millions
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), by annual income between 2007 and 2015.
Overall
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,
people
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 who earned $100,000 or more were the highest in
the
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both the
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 beginning and the end of the period. Meanwhile, the number of
people
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 who earned $50K-$75K and $75K-$100K remained
relative
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relatively
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 stable throughout the period. In 2007,
American
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Americans
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 who have annual income
over
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of over
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 $100K was the highest among other categories, recording around just below 30
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millions
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million
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.
This
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 was followed closely by
people
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 who earned $25K-$50K, at around 26
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millions
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million
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.
Number
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The number
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 of
households
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received
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that received
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 less than $25K ranked
third,
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at 25
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millions
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million
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. US
households
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who
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that
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 received annual
paycheck
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paychecks
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 between $50K-$75K and $75K-$100K represented smaller figures, at below 25
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millions
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million
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. Over the following years, US
households
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who
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that
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 received
Annual
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an annual
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 paycheck between $50K-$100K remained unchanged,
whereas
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people
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 who received $25K-$50K and less than $25K experienced a slight increase to 30% and almost 30%
respectively
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, respectively
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. Meanwhile, the richest group decreased to around 27%. By 2015, the richest group increased to 34%, making it the largest population among other categories.
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However
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 the remaining group was relatively stable from
previous
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the previous
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 period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, millions, people, k-, k with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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