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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table below shows the percentage use of four different fuel types to generate electricity in five Asian countries in 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table compares the proportions of five fuel
sources
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 that were used to generate electricity across five countries in 2005.
Overall
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, coal and lignite accounted for the highest proportion in Malaysia,
whereas
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 nuclear
power
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 accounted for the lowest proportion in
Thailand
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. It is
also
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 noticeable that the second-highest figure
overall
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 was recorded for nuclear
power
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 in
Japan
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. Looking first at the higher figures, coal and lignite in Malaysia recorded the highest figure
overall
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, at 61%. At 49%, nuclear
power
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 in
Japan
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 recorded the second-highest figure
overall
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, followed by hydro and wind in South Korea, at 48%.
By comparison
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, in South Korea, the percentage of nuclear
power
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 was three times as high as that of other
sources
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, at 33% and 11%, respectively.
Additionally
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, the proportions of other
sources
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 were the same in Singapore and
Japan
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, both standing at 39%.
Similarly
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, coal and lignite in Singapore and other
sources
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 in
Thailand
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 both accounted for 42%. Turning to the remaining categories, the proportion of coal and lignite in
Japan
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 was twice as high as that in
Thailand
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, at 6% and 3%, respectively.
This
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 was followed by Malaysia and
Thailand
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, which recorded figures of 19% for nuclear
power
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 and hydro and wind, respectively. Meanwhile, petroleum products recorded identical figures of 3% in Singapore, South Korea and
Japan
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.
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, nuclear
power
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 was not used at all in
Thailand
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, power, thailand, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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