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The internet has made possible for everybody to read anything online for free. This will make it unnecessary to pay for printed materials such as books or newspapers in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
On the topic of whether the abundance and accessibility of digital
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 paying for print
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 redundant, I strongly disagree.
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 the internet provides a plethora of resources, habitual usage of physical
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 will ensure
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 enduring existence.
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Admittedly, the vast amount of free resources available online might pose a threat to the relevance of print
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. In a world in which almost anything can be found online, from news to novels, the continued existence of
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 could be questioned. There is a certain amount of convenience in not having to visit a physical store
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 in order to acquire new reading materials. It might
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 be beneficial for people who have to commute to work to carry less weight around. Plenty of different
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 and articles can be assembled on one e-reader. But when it comes to the question of whether those materials are inherently cheaper or even free, I would have to disagree. Most articles are hidden behind paywalls nowadays
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 e-
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 on the most common sites like “Apple
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” appear to increase in price dramatically as inflation continues to rise.
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On the other side of the equation are habitual readers. These people are notoriously drawn to the qualities of real paper,
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 as the feel and even the scent. Avid readers nowadays often fall into one of two categories
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 young and enamoured with the concept and romanticism of reading as much as with the
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 themselves, and elderly with a
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 habit of reading the newspaper. Plenty of my friends read for both content and aesthetics. The publishing industry is very aware of
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 trend, selling specially bound editions that look deliberately pretty. The market for those
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 is flourishing despite the higher prices. Social
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 niches
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 as “Book-Tok” or “Book-Tube” have long since become instrumental in marketing- not only
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, but an entire lifestyle centred around being a reader.
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, the older generations are creatures of habit. Many of my geriatric patients prefer to read the local newspaper over breakfast. I would earn a lot of dismay
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 if I were to suggest that they read online
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. And that does not even touch upon the matter of accessibility, which has been proven in a 2021 study from Copenhagen to plummet after a certain age range. As a digital native, it is hard to comprehend, but I experienced firsthand that digital
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 not unlike learning a new language or advanced arithmetic for the elderly population.
Conclusion
For these reasons, a lack of accessibility for all age groups and ingrained habits with inherent marketability in most avid readers, I believe that
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 and newspapers will never be made redundant by online
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 statement holds despite the modern conveniences and
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cost-saving
 potential that digital
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 bring to the table.

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Task response
State your main view in even simpler words in the first line. You disagree because online reading is not always free and because many people still want paper books and papers.
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Keep the focus on the exact claim. The key point is whether people will need to pay for printed books and papers. Add one clear link after each example to show why print will still be bought.
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The point about older people is useful, but make it less wide. Not all older people find online reading hard. Say that some older readers may prefer print because it is familiar and easy to use.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: online media first, then reasons why print will stay, then a final view. Make the first body paragraph end with a short sentence that clearly says online content is often paid for too.
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Use fewer long sentences. For example, split the sentence about your friends, the book market, and social media into two or three short sentences. This will make your meaning easier to follow.
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Use simple linking words more often: 'First', 'Also', 'However', and 'For this reason'. This will help the reader see how each idea leads to the next.
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In the last paragraph, change the long first sentence into a direct summary of your two main reasons. This will give the ending more force.
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You give a clear view from the start and keep this view through the whole essay.
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You answer both parts of the issue: free online content and the future need for printed books and papers.
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Your examples of paid online articles, e-books, book trends, and newspaper readers support your view well.
Coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear main idea, and the ideas move in a natural order.
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The final paragraph returns to your main view and sums up the key reasons.
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Words such as 'Admittedly', 'But', 'Conversely', and 'For these reasons' help show contrast and cause.
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