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The diagram below shows the plans for designing a trade show floor from 2009 to 2010.

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The diagram below shows the plans for designing a trade show floor from 2009 to 2010.
The maps compare two floor
plans
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 designed for a trade show in 2009 and 2010.
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, the floor
plans
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 for a trade program experienced a few considerable redevelopments over the period.
Exhibition
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area
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 and conference hall swaped there locaton.
Interetingly
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Interestingly
, main
entrences
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entrances
,
refreashment
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refreshment
area
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, and biology areas remained at same location.
To begin
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 with, exploring the given
plans
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, the
given
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two main entrances and
provided
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the provided
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 two
registraion
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registration
 areas will remain untouched in both
plans
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, which
located
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in
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at
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 the top of the
plans
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, apart
form
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from
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 the conference hall
completely
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 replaced by
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exhibition
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an exhibition
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area
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 and relocated as well. In 2010,
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the
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south-western corner
covered
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was covered
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 with
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exhibition
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an exhibition
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area
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, which is more than doubled in size with more display stands.
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Exhibition
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area
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 has removed
meeting
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the meeting
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area
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 next to it. In terms of
conference
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the conference
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 hall, situated
in
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on
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 the south-north side, it is
in
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the same size.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words plans, exhibition, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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