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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

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The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.
The map illustrates the town of Canterbury
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 and the two possible locations for a school.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the two sites exhibit different surroundings.
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for
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For
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 example, the
s2
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S2
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 location is centered midtown
where
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, where
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 it is encircled by houses,
whereas
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 the S1 site is in the
country
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countryside
side
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To begin
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 with, the S2 location is situated south
to
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of
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 the town center where it is surrounded by housing.
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, there is a huge university
in
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on
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 the northern
side
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 between the housing zone and the
country
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countryside
side
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.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 location is 7km away from a city called Chartham that lies in the south-west and is populated by 4,500
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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.
In contrast
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, the S1 site is situated in the east of the map in the
country
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countryside
side
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.
Also
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, it is positioned 5km away from Sturry, which is populated by 7000 people.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • contrast
  • location
  • accessibility
  • residential areas
  • facilities
  • traffic
  • transportation
  • environment
  • cost
  • feasibility
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