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Band 1

More and more people no longer read newspaper and watch TV to get information. Instead they use Internet to get actual news. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give your own opinions or relevant examples.

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Introduction
There is an ongoing topic that individuals don't tend to read the
newspapares
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newspapers
 and watch TV.
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that
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 they prefer to get information from
Internet
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the Internet
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 and social media. I think it has its own
prons
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pros
 and cons
but
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, but
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i
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I
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 can say the negativity
overweigh
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outweighs
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 the positivity.
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THis
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 essay will express my opinions regarding
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 matter.
Body paragraph 1
The internet gives people instant access to
many
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 breaking news from around the world.
This
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 invention helps people from anywhere in the world to connect and
and
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apply
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spread
informations
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in a
blank
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blink
 of
eye
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.
Conclusion
To illustrate
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, there are many students who are studying from a diffirent countries and
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 their university degree
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online.
Furthermore
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,
There
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there
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 are big
campanies
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companies
 which have thousands of employees around the world.
Such
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 as
Freelancering
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Freelancing
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task response
Your main view is clear: you think using the internet for news is more bad than good. However, the body only explains good points, so it does not fully answer the question. Add a clear paragraph about the bad side, such as false news, too much news, or news that is not checked.
task response
Explain each point more. Say why fast news is useful, then give one real or clear example. After that, explain why the bad side is stronger. End with a short final paragraph that repeats your view.
task response
Some examples do not clearly show how people get news. Online study and work for a company are not strong examples for this topic. Use examples about a false story on social media, or people learning about an event very fast online.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, good side, bad side, and conclusion. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main idea. Your second paragraph is about fast news, but the next paragraph moves to study and work without a clear link.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a clear way: First, For example, However, As a result, and In conclusion. Also check word choice and spelling, such as “newspapers”, “pros”, “cons”, “information”, “in the blink of an eye”, and “companies”.
task response
You clearly give your own view in the introduction, and you try to discuss both the good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction and starts with a main point about the speed of internet news. This is a useful start.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breaking news
  • instant access to information
  • online news platforms
  • real-time updates
  • news alerts
  • reliable news source
  • compare different viewpoints
  • digital media
  • social media feeds
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • fact-check information
  • sensational headlines
  • clickbait articles
  • traditional media
  • print newspapers
  • media literacy
  • stay informed
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