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Band 4

You have been offered a place at a university and wish to find suitable accommodation. Write a letter to the accommodation officer including the following information: the type of accommodation you wish to find some de

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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, I am
writting
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writing
 to request you to find me a suitable
accomodation
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accommodation
. I
recentlly
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recently
 got enrolled in the University of Home Science, near the main street. I am looking for a place which is
walking
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within walking
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 distance from my college and has a
sharing
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shared
 room to
accomodate
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accommodate
 my colleague from the same field of study.
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, it should have an attached kitchen with
balcony
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a balcony
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.
Also
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, it would be convenient for us if each room is attached to a
batroom
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bathroom
 for personal use. I am travelling from far, and I
am wanting
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want
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 to shift soon, near the university area. In
additon
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addition
, I wanted to know about
the
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apply
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the food arrangements and facilities like internet, electricity and washer area. Is
this
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 available? And if yes, what are the additional fares for the same
.
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?
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 I am looking forward
for you
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to your
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 response at
earliest
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the earliest
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 possible time. Yours sincerely, Puja

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task response
You explain the home you want well, but give more detail about when you will arrive, how long you need the room, and how much you can pay.
task response
Ask your questions in a more direct way. For example: “Could you tell me whether meals, internet, and a washing area are provided?”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and end. Use clear links such as “First”, “Also”, and “Finally” to make the ideas flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each paragraph. Put the room needs in one paragraph and the questions about food and services in another.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more formal opening and ending: “Dear Sir or Madam,” and “Yours faithfully,” if you do not know the officer’s name.
task response
You clearly state that you need a shared room near the university and list useful needs, such as a kitchen, balcony, and private bathroom.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because each paragraph has a main purpose: your request, your needs, and your questions.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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