IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

7.0 / 9
Band scoreView breakdown ↓
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
Road
Use synonyms
safety
Use synonyms
 experts argue that
cyclists
Use synonyms
 should pass a test to demonstrate their ability to ride safely before being allowed to use public
roads
Use synonyms
.
Although
Linking Words
 cycling can be learned independently, I believe that requiring
cyclists
Use synonyms
 to obtain a government-issued
licence
Use synonyms
 could improve
road
Use synonyms
safety
Use synonyms
.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, some people believe that a
licence
Use synonyms
 is unnecessary because cycling does not require any special talent or formal training. They argue that people can learn
this
Linking Words
 skill independently and that careful, attentive behaviour is sufficient to avoid accidents.
For example
Linking Words
, beginners can practise in wide, open areas where they have enough space to develop their cycling skills without endangering other
road
Use synonyms
 users. Once they become confident, they may feel capable of riding on public
roads
Use synonyms
 without obtaining an official
licence
Use synonyms
. From
this
Linking Words
 perspective, a compulsory licensing system might be considered an unnecessary requirement for a relatively simple skill.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
Linking Words
, I believe that an officially recognised cycling
licence
Use synonyms
 could help improve
road
Use synonyms
safety
Use synonyms
 by ensuring that
cyclists
Use synonyms
 possess the necessary practical skills and knowledge of traffic regulations.
This
Linking Words
 is because applicants would be required to pass a test before being permitted to cycle on public
roads
Use synonyms
, allowing their ability to control a bicycle and respond to traffic situations to be assessed.
For instance
Linking Words
, a licensing test could evaluate applicants’ knowledge of
road
Use synonyms
 signs and
safety
Use synonyms
 rules,
as well as
Linking Words
 their ability to control their speed and ride safely in different conditions. By ensuring that
cyclists
Use synonyms
 meet these basic requirements before entering traffic,
such
Linking Words
 a system could reduce the likelihood of accidents and protect both
cyclists
Use synonyms
 and other
road
Use synonyms
 users.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
although
Linking Words
 riding a bicycle is relatively easy to learn independently, I believe that requiring
cyclists
Use synonyms
 to obtain an officially recognised
licence
Use synonyms
 would be beneficial, as it could ensure that they are adequately prepared to use public
roads
Use synonyms
 and help reduce the risk of accidents.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
State your view even more strongly in the first part. You agree, but you can say that the test should be short and should focus on road rules and safe riding.
task response
Develop the first main point a little more. Explain why people may feel a test is not needed, then show why this is less important than road safety.
task response
Your examples fit the ideas well. To make them more real, give one clear case, such as a rider turning at a busy road or riding near a bus.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: opening, two main parts, and ending. Keep this plan in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few more links inside long parts to show cause and result, such as “As a result”, “For this reason”, and “This means that”.
coherence and cohesion
Some lines repeat the same idea about safe riding and road safety. You can make the writing tighter by saying each main idea once, then adding a new reason or example.
task response
You answer the full question and make your own view clear: cyclists should have a licence before using public roads.
task response
Your main reason is clear and well explained: a test can check both bike control and knowledge of road rules.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one clear main idea, and the move from the other view to your own view is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending match well, and the ending clearly brings back your main view.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: