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The table below shows the percentage of GDP occupied by health spending in five different countries in 2022.

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The table below shows the percentage of GDP occupied by health spending in five different countries in 2022.
The given table compares the proportion of GDP occupied by health spending in five different nations in 2022.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the US had the highest
percentage
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 in total spending,
whereas
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Germany
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 was dominant in terms of public
.
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spending.
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 It is
also
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 evident that the US held the largest fraction in private,
while
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Japan
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 and Italy had
the
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 similar pattern in public. In detail, the share of
Japan
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 in terms of total expenses accounted for 20% in 2022, compared with 25%.
Moreover
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, there was a slight difference of 5
percentage
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 points between France and
Germany
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 in total spending, at 30% and 35%, respectively.
Likewise
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, the US represented the utmost proportion at 40% and 17% in the public sphere.
However
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, there was a noticeable difference of 3
percentage
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 points between France and
Germany
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, at 15% and 18%, respectively.
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, there was the same fraction in both countries, namely
Japan
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 and Italy
at
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 10%.
Following
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this
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 trend, the US stood at 20% in private spending, making it the highest one compared with others in 2022.
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,
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Japan
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 accounted for 5% in private expenses,
while
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 Italy had 8%
much
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, much
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 higher than
Japan
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 did. Meanwhile, the
percentage
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 of France was 12%,
whereas
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 15% for
Germany
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 in terms of private spending.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, germany, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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