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The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006.

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The table shows the percentage of people living in different types of dwellings in three parts of Australia in 2001 and 2006.
The table illustrates the proportion of people who are living in four different types of
residence
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 in three various part of Australia in 2001 and 2006.
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, the different types of
residence
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were
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increased throughout the period. Houses were consistently the most common type of dwelling throughout the period.
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 others were least popular in different parts of Australia. In 2001,House accounted for 79
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residence
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residences
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, making it
dominant
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 category. Followed by semi attached house at 11. Meanwhile,
flat
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flats
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 and
apartment
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apartments
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 represented
at
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9 and 1
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residence
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residences
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 respectively. The proportion of hose
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 rose to 76 in 2006, 65 in 2001, before reaching 88 in 2001, 89 in 2006.
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, semi attached
hose
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hoses
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 were
decreas
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decreased
 at 11 in 2001, 12 in 2006 in Victoria and
then
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,
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 Northern Territory, the number of
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residence
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residents
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 increased
at
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to
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 13 in 2001 and 15 in 2006.
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, Tasmania
fell
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saw a decrease in
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 the number of
residence
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 from13 to 3 in 2001, 14 to 3 in 2006. Turning to flat and other, flat represented 9% in 2001 and 10% in 2006
at
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 Victoria. Before the
flatuated
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 in
recidence
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residence
 throughout the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words residence with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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