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Fresh water has always been a limited resources in some nations of the world today however growing global demand has turned This problem into global one. What are the causes behind the increased demand and what steps can government and individuals take to a dress this

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Introduction
In modern life,
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 has become more difficult compared with the past, particularly in some countries, which is becoming a worldwide issue for many
people
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due to
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 their demand for
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. In
this
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 essay, an attempt will be made to examine the causes behind the increased request of
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, and what measures can be taken by the government and
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 to address
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 problem.
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On the one hand, it is obvious that drinking
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 in some places in the world is a challenge, especially in certain places where population growth occurs every year.
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, these places
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 need
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 for washing, drinking, and cooking.
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, countries
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 as African countries, which have a significant population increasing with limited
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 resources.
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, using
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 to meet their needs is difficult.
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On the other hand
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, there are numerous countermeasures that can be taken to solve
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 issues. Regarding governments, they can apply strict
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 regulation and guide
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how
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 to use
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 properly, and impose penalties for those who abuse
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 to mitigate
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 issues. Individuals,
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, can consume
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 and not waste it by following the government's policies.
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, in some nations,
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 as Algeria, they applied and deployed a list that guides
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 on where and how to use
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, which helps them to consume
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 and prevents them from abusing it.
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Conclusion
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In conclusion,
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 there is global demand for
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due to
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 global
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 issues, both individuals and governments can cooperate to address
this
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 issue by applying the rules. I believe that consuming
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 can solve
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 issue.

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Explain more than population growth. You can also write about farming, factories, and higher living needs. Then give clear steps for both the state and people.
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Make your main ideas more exact. For example, say that the state can fix old pipes, build water stores, and use farm water in a better way. People can take shorter showers, fix leaks, and reuse water for plants.
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Your example is not clear enough. Explain what the list in Algeria says, how people use it, and why it cuts water use. Use one clear, full example instead of a short one.
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Some ideas are not correct or clear. People should use less water, not simply 'consume water'. In the end, say that saving water, not consuming it, can help solve the problem.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. However, the first body part should focus only on causes, while the second should focus only on steps.
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Use clearer links between ideas. For example: 'One main cause is population growth.' 'Another cause is farming.' 'To deal with this, governments can...' These links make the order easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating words such as 'water issues' and 'global'. Use simple other words, such as 'the problem', 'water shortage', or 'this need'.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph follow one plan: main point, why it happens or helps, then an example. This will make your writing easier to read.
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You answer both parts of the question: you give a cause and suggest steps for the state and people.
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You use a real country example, which helps show your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: start, two body parts, and end.
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You use linking words such as 'Furthermore', 'For example', 'however', and 'In conclusion'.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater shortage
  • growing population
  • rising consumption
  • domestic water use
  • rapid urbanisation
  • agricultural irrigation
  • water-intensive industries
  • climate change
  • prolonged droughts
  • unreliable rainfall
  • water scarcity
  • ageing pipes
  • water leakage
  • modern infrastructure
  • efficient irrigation
  • rainwater harvesting
  • water-saving devices
  • conserve water
  • strict water regulations
  • public awareness campaigns
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