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Fresh water has always been a limited resources in some nations of the world today however growing global demand has turned This problem into global one. What are the causes behind the increased demand and what steps can government and individuals take to a dress this

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Introduction
In
the
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modern life,
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 has become more
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difficult
 compared with the past, particularly in some countries, which is becoming
worldwide
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issue
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 for many
people
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due to
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 their demand
of
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water
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. In
this
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, and what measures can
taken
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 by the government and
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 to address
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 problem.
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On the one hand, it is
obviously
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 that drinking
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 in some places in the world is a
challenging
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challenge
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espacially
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especially
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certain places where
experienced a
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population growth
every
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 year.
Furthermore
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,
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 places
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also
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 need
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 for washing, drinking, and cooking.
For example
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,
the
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countries
such
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 as
africian coutries
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African countries
, which have a
singificant
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significant
 population increasing with limited
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 resources.
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, using
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 is
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difficult
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Body paragraph 2
O
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 are numerous countermeasures
can
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 be taken to solve
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 issues. Regarding governments, they can apply strict
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 regulation and guide
people
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how
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on how
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 to use
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 properly, and
forcing penalities
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 for those who abuse
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 to mitigate
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issue
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. Individuals,
however
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,
they
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can consume
using
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water
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 and not waste it by following
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 policies.
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, in some nations,
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guide
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people
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where
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 and how to use
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, which helps them to consume
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 and prevents them from abusing it.
Conclusion
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 there is global demand
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water
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due to
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 global
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 issues, both individuals and
government
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governments
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 can cooperate to address
this
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issue
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 by applying the rules. I believe that consuming
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 can solve
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the water's
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water's
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issue
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Answer both parts with more detail. Explain why water use is rising, such as more people, more food work, city growth, and more water use at home.
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Make each main idea clear. For example, say that more people need more water for food, washing, and drinking. Then explain how this puts pressure on a small water supply.
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Give steps for both the state and people. The state can fix old pipes, build water stores, reuse water, and make rules. People can take short showers, fix leaks, and use less water at home.
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Use examples that clearly show your point. The Algeria example needs more facts: what rule was used, what people did, and how it helped save water.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. Keep this plan, but make the first body part only about causes and the second only about steps.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show the flow: First, Second, As a result, For example, However, and In conclusion. Do not start too many sentences with the same link.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence joins well with the next one. For example, replace "These places are also need water" with "People in these places also need water for daily life."
coherence and cohesion
Write one clear topic sentence at the start of each body part. This helps the reader know the main point before the details.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating "water issue" and "water problem" many times. You can also use "this problem", "water shortage", or "limited supply".
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You answer both parts of the question: causes of higher demand and steps by the state and people.
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You use a real country example, which helps make the essay more real.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has an introduction, body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use links such as "For example", "Furthermore", and "In conclusion" to guide the reader.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater shortage
  • growing population
  • rising consumption
  • domestic water use
  • rapid urbanisation
  • agricultural irrigation
  • water-intensive industries
  • climate change
  • prolonged droughts
  • unreliable rainfall
  • water scarcity
  • ageing pipes
  • water leakage
  • modern infrastructure
  • efficient irrigation
  • rainwater harvesting
  • water-saving devices
  • conserve water
  • strict water regulations
  • public awareness campaigns
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