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One of the biggest problems facing the world today is growing enough food to feed the ever-expanding population. Genetically Modified foods are the best way to solve this issue. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
As the global population continues to grow, producing enough
food
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 to meet the needs of everyone has become an increasingly serious challenge. Some people believe that genetically modified (
GM
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) foods are the most effective solution to
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 problem.
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 I agree that genetic modification can improve agricultural productivity, I believe it should be combined with other measures to achieve global
food
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 security.
Body paragraph 1
One major advantage of
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crops
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 is their potential to increase yields and withstand certain environmental challenges.
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, some genetically modified
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 are designed to resist particular pests or tolerate drought, which can help farmers reduce crop losses and maintain production under difficult conditions.
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 is especially beneficial in regions where water is scarce or agricultural land is limited.
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, as urban populations expand, farmland may be lost to housing and infrastructure.
Crops
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 that produce higher yields under suitable conditions could
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 help farmers grow more
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 without requiring a proportional increase in cultivated land.
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, genetic modification can make a valuable contribution to feeding the world's growing population.
Body paragraph 2
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,
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 foods alone cannot eliminate hunger, because
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 shortages are not always caused by insufficient agricultural production. In some regions,
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 is wasted during storage and transportation,
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 in others, poverty and inadequate distribution systems prevent people from accessing sufficient supplies. Improving storage facilities, reducing
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 waste and developing more efficient distribution networks could
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 make existing
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 supplies available to more people.
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, governments should promote sustainable farming practices and carefully assess the environmental and health implications of particular
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crops
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. These measures would help maximise the benefits of agricultural technology
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 addressing the wider causes of
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 insecurity.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I agree that genetically modified
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 can help tackle global
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 shortages by increasing productivity and reducing certain types of crop loss.
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, I do not believe they are the best solution in isolation. Combining
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 technology with improved
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 distribution, waste reduction and sustainable agriculture would be a more comprehensive approach to feeding the world's expanding population.

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task response
Make your view even more direct in the first paragraph. You say GM food can help, but is not the best answer by itself. This is clear, but you could state this in one short, strong line.
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Add one more real example. For example, explain how better cold stores can stop fruit, fish, or grain from going bad before it reaches people.
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Develop the point about risks a little more. You name health and nature risks, but one short explanation of why careful checks are needed would make the answer more full.
coherence and cohesion
Your main ideas are in a clear order: GM food first, then the limits of GM food, then your final view. Keep this clear four-part plan in future essays.
coherence and cohesion
Some links are used very well, such as “For example”, “Furthermore”, “However”, and “In addition”. Try not to depend on link words alone; also use clear topic sentences to show the point of each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
The second body paragraph has several ideas: waste, poor people, transport, farming, and safety. It is still easy to follow, but you could give a little more space to the two most important ideas and make the paragraph feel less packed.
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You answer the full question and give a clear, balanced view. You explain both why GM crops can help and why they cannot solve hunger on their own.
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Your reasons fit the question well. Higher crop output, less crop loss, food waste, and poor access to food are all useful points.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear job, and the last paragraph brings your main view together well.
coherence and cohesion
The essay moves smoothly from one idea to the next. The use of “However” clearly marks the change to the other side of the view.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • growth
  • food
  • population
  • genetically modified
  • solution
  • produce
  • crops
  • land
  • resistant
  • pests
  • diseases
  • pesticides
  • weather
  • conditions
  • farmers
  • climate change
  • health
  • risks
  • environmental
  • effects
  • economic
  • considerations
  • seeds
  • expensive
  • access
  • smaller
  • poorer
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