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Some esperts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Today, learning a foreign
language
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 is becoming very important for
students
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, specially, If they want to study
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abroad. Well, some people think that
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children
 should start acquiring knowledge of internationl tongue
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instead
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 the time of higher studies. I firmly support
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At
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students
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 are open to
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 innovative subjects with higher interest. If they begin to learn an international
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 age, they are more likely to have
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 understanding and familiarity with that specific tongue.
Additionaly
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already
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 that
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untill
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until
 they hit the age of secondary
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children
 who are
gainning
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gaining
 knowledge of
English
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the English
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 in Pakistan from primary classes get more comfortable in speaking and writing as compared to those who didn't start learning at
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 age. So
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, Parents should take
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 on a serious note and teach their child a specific new tongue.
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,
Students
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 require a lot of time to learn
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 way of communication at secondary
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while
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 managing their higher studies side by side. More
hardwork
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hard work
, consistency, time and focus would be needed to master a new
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, if a student is about to apply for foreign studies, after secondary
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 is better to have
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 understanding of
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the native
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language
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 of that specific country.
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 student in
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an international language
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 has more chances for selection
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 abroad as compared to weak spoken student. That's why
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 early schools play a vital role in teaching
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foreign
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 contributes to
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 of
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 too.
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, I would like
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 by saying that,
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 learning at
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 ages allow them to gain an additional foreign skill
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 there would be no need to worry about
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toungue
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language
 at secondary
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that
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students
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 should be taught new languages at primary
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task response
You give a clear view and answer the main question. To make the answer more full, also talk about one or two bad points of starting very young, such as less time for other school work or the need for good teachers. Then explain why the good points are still stronger.
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Your main ideas are good: young children can learn more easily, and early learning can save time later. Explain each idea with one clear reason and one real example. Some examples are too general, so make them more clear and close to the point.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. This makes it easy to follow. Use a more direct plan: first say the good points, then say the bad points, and last say why the good points are greater.
coherence and cohesion
Some links are not natural, for example "So that" and "That's why". Use simple links such as "For example", "Also", "However", "As a result", and "In conclusion". Do not use too many links at the start of each sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea. In the second body paragraph, the ideas about study time and going abroad are both useful, but they need a clearer link. Add a first sentence that tells the reader what the paragraph will show.
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You clearly state that you support learning a new language at primary school, and you keep this view through the essay.
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The Pakistan example helps show how early English learning may help children speak and write with more ease.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has clear paragraphs, and the final paragraph repeats your main view in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as "Furthermore", "Moreover", and "For instance" help the reader see the move from one idea to the next.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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