The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a singe year.

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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a singe year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a singe year.
The diagram illustrate deference in the popularity of three types of transport -
car
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,
motorcycle
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and
bicycle
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,
amound
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among
young
people
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in the UK, US, France and Italy.
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, the category
car
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is most
choosen
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chosen
by youth to travel.
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However
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in
France
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France,
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it is different because there
bicycle
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is more popular than in
other
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the other
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mentioned countries
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countries mentioned
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. But
also
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the
motorcycle
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is not so preferable choice in any of the
country
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countries
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. The UK and
US
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the US
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have the same percentage of
people
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who prefer driving by
car
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which
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, which
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is 60% for both. But in the UK
young
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, young
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people
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like
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bicycle
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bicycles
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more than
people
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in
US
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the US
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, when
youth
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young people
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in
Us more
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the US
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prefer
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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. Italy has almost the same
persentage
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percentage
of
car
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and
bicycle
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users
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users,
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it is 40% and 45%.
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However
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Italy has the highest
point
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percentage
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of
car
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users
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, which
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that is
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75%. Just about 10% each of young
people
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use
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motorcycle
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motorcycles
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and
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bicycle
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bicycles
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as a transport to travel.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, motorcycle, bicycle, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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