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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
The given table compares the
number
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 of visitors and their
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amount of
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expenditure in five different countries between 2012 and 2013.
Overall
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, France attracted the most
tourists
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 in both years,
whereas
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 the largest
tourist
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 spending was recorded in the USA. China was the only country that witnessed a drop in the
number
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 of
travelers
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. France received the largest
number
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 of
tourists
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, 83
million
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 and 84.7
million
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tourists
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, respectively.
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, its
tourist
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 expenditure was 53.6 and 56.1
billion
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dollars
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 in the following years, which was lower than the USA figure. In the USA,
tourist
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 spending recorded the largest
amount
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 among the five countries, at 126.2 and 139.6
billion
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dollars
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, respectively.
In contrast
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, Spain attracted 57.5
million
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tourists
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 in 2012, and in the next year it increased to 60.7
million
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. The
amount
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 of spending money for visitors in Spain increased in a similar trend, from 56.3
billion
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dollars
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 to 60.4
billion
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dollars
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. China received 57.7
million
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tourists
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 in 2012;
however
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, in the next
year
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 it attracted fewer
tourists
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, 55.7
million
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tourists
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. Despite a lower
number
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 of
tourist
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 arrivals, its total spending increased from 50
billion
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dollars
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 to 51.7
billion
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dollars
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. Italy is the country that received the lowest
number
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 of
travelers
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 in both years, 46.4 and 47.7
million
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tourists
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. The
amount
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 of expenditure for Italy was 41.2
billion
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dollars
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 in 2012 and 43.9
billion
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dollars
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 in 2013.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, amount, tourists, tourist, million, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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