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The diagram below shows how electricity in generated in a hydroelectric power station.

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The diagram below shows how electricity in generated in a hydroelectric power station.
The provided diagram illustrates the
process
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 of
electricity
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 generation in a hydroelectric power station.
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, the
electricity
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 generating
process
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 undergoes
through
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three main stages,
first
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the first
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 of which is
intake
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the intake
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 of
the
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water
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 from the initial source and the
last
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 stage
of
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is
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 going into
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir
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which
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, which
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 is
preceeded
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preceded
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 by the shifted phase of flow of
water
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. The entire production
process
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takes its start from the filling
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starts with the filling of a
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water
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reservoir
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into
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behind
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 a dam
which
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, which
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 is
getting
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ready to produce
electricity
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via
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by
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 pumping
water
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during the
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at
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 night and
obtaining
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generating
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electricity
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 during a daytime. Afterwards, the generated
electricity
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 enters
into
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the power station consisting of
generator
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a generator
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 and reversible turbines. Within
this
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 phase
the
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, the
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electricity
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 during the
night time the
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nighttime is used to pump water
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water
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 is pumped up into
high
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a high
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reservoir
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and
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, and
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on the contrary
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conversely
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.
the
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The
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electricity
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 is generated during the daytime. The whole
process
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 ends with a low-level
reservoir
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 which pushes up the
water
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 and supports
electricity
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 generating
process
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, electricity, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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