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e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

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e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The
table
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 and pie charts provide the data about the police
budget
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 in one area of Britain during the period between 2017 and 2018. The
table
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 gives information about the sources,
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 the charts illustrate the distribution of
this
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budget
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.
Overall
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,
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 is clear from the
table
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 that the sources of policy
budget
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 gradually increased between 2017 and 2018, with the total
budget
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 growing from 304.7m to 318.6 million (in EURO). Meanwhile, the national government contributed the highest amount,
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 other resources,
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 as grants, contributed the smallest amount. Over
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 period, spending categories,
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 as salaries of officers and staff, considerably decreased, and the technology sector followed an opposite trend,
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 buildings and transportation remained unchanged.
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 the
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, the funding came from three sources, which significantly rose during a period of one year.
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, the national government contributed the largest amount, increasing by 2.3m in 2018, and the local taxes increased by 11.1 million
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, the smallest portion was granted at 38.5m through grants. In the pie charts, the largest portion of the funding was spent on officers' and staff salaries, compared to other categories, but it declined to 69 per cent in 2018.
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 a growth was observed in the technology sector, reaching 14%, simultaneously, the proportion for the buildings and transport remained unchanged, which was at 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, budget with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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